Friday Fictioneers is a weekly challenge set by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff Fields to write a #100wordstory in response to a photo prompt. Photo prompt (c) Roger Bulltot.
They were here, on their way back from the beach. Rob, followed by the kids—the twins, who’ve just turned thirteen, and Amelie, the youngest one.
They followed Rob as he led them along the moss-laden brick wall, up the broken steps, to the opening, from where they could have an unhindered view of the plains.
I followed them.
It was so long since I held them close, the boys and the little one, Amelie—What if I could…just once?
“I saw mom…behind that wall!” sobbed Amelie.
Rob rushed to comfort her. I watched, achingly, from the corner.
Linking this with #FridayFictioneers hosted by the amazing Rochelle Wiseoff.
Thanks to Rochelle for hosting Friday Fictioneers every week. Bloggers post their stories here and everyone ends up reading one another, including Rochelle who visits every post written— a fantastic encouragement for all the writers. If you’re interested, click here to read the amazing variety of narratives and storylines, inspired by the photo prompt.
Thank you very much!
Ohh if only she could. Beautiful and touching write.
Thanks Rajlakshmi! 🙂
That was beautiful, sad and creepy all at once! Nicely done Esha!
Thanks a lot Sanch. Trying my hand at fiction…still a long way to go but loving the challenge every week. 🙂
To be taken from your family, never to hold your loved ones again–yes, that’s a special kind of torture.
Heartbreaking story! The mom’s soul lingers near her family, so sad.
Thank you so much, Sulekha. 🙂
Did not expect the tale to take a tragic turn! Well written Esha, you caught me by surprise. A tragic tale written beautifully which captures the true emotion of that loving bond!
Thank you so much, Keerthi. Its amazing how the mind works when you see a prompt like that! 😀
What a beautiful and sad story!
Thank you Alice! Spooky turned sad 😉
You made me ache for the departed mother. Lovely, ethereal story well told.
Thank you very much Rochelle for your encouraging words. It was a great prompt and a very evocative picture that got so many stories this week. Thanks,
Such an achingly poignant story! You’ve captured the mother’s ache and the child’s grief very well.
Thank you for your kind words! The prompt has been one of the best that I’ve seen so far! Love all the amazingly inspiring writers of #FF!
a beautifully sad story of the endearing love of a Mom for her children. Great story.
Thank you so much Jelli! The prompt was great this week to elicit so many varied stories from everyone. 🙂
I love this prompt. I’ve already written a few little stories and a couple of scenes to go with it. It’s just that inspirational! 🙂
That’s fantastic! Nothing like a prompt that fuels the creative imagination to its best. Would love to read all your stories now 😀
The longing of the Mother, her ghostly love, is palpable in this prose. Well done, Esha.
Thank you so much, Kelvin. The picture prompt did elicit quite a few spooky tales this time, don’t you think? I’m glad you liked my ghostly tale.
Beautiful, very beautiful!
Thank you so much, Moon.
A very touching story, thanks
Thank you so much Bryan. Glad you liked my spooky sad tale.
Simply told – simply good. Offering a clear and effective narrative.
Thank you very much, Michael. I’m so glad you think so. Very encouraging words for a newbie short story writer.
I can feel that mother’s aching arms. So touching.
So glad my words managed to portray that. Thank you very much, Amie.
So sad when we are separated with that veil… it takes a child to see through it.
It is true, what you say! Children alone can see through that! In this case, with a lot of heartache and anguish as well as loss! 🙁
I agree with Neil… the story does echo the broken building. It was beautifully told
Thank you so much, Dale! So glad to hear you say so! This made my day. 🙂
The story echoes the broken building
That’s nice to know. 🙂
A tragic tale well written. We can feel the mother’s anguish. Well done.
That’s so good to know. Still a newbie so every word of encouragement works wonders at this end! 🙂
many ghost stories this week. this is one of the best. well done.
Thank you so much! So glad to hear that. 🙂
A mother’s heart aches and feels for her kids. A poignant motherly tale well sketched.
Esha, I have based my story on a hindi musical film , “Lekin” starring Viond khanna and Dimple. Do watch it .
Thank you so much, Kalpana, for your words. You’re right a mother’s heart always feels for her children.
One last reunion.
Yes, in a way!
Whew. This is heartbreaking.
Thanks Kona. Yes, mums can hold a lot of love in their hearts even after they’re gone.
Such a nice scene, and then a tragic twist. Nicely done.
Thank you, Iain. The ruins spoke of such a story…I only had to put it down in words.
Oh, poor mum, did she die there? Beautiful and sad story.
Oh yes, sadly enough, she did! Thanks for your appreciation. 🙂