The Caller – #FridayFictioneers

Friday Fictioneers is a weekly challenge set by Rochelle Wisoff Fields to write a 100-word story in response to a photo prompt. You can find other stories here.  Here’s my take on the prompt (See pic below). Image: J Hardy Carroll

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THE CALLER

The man dropped his bag near the phone booth, on the busy subway. Nervously, he turned around, looking for someone.

Walking up to the caller machine, he put in a coin and waited with bated breath.

“Hello!” said he, “I’ve got the money.”

The voice at the other end said, “I can see them waiting…so, why did you get the police, huh?”

The man clutched onto the bag with the money but the sound of a gun shot startled him. As the bullet hit his chest, he fell, face down, and then collapsed.

The bag remained. A shadow walked away, vanishing into the twilight.

47 thoughts

    1. Thank you. 🙂 To answer your question—he had obviously seen the cops while entering the subway as he was following the man (the victim) who carried the money. Once he was done, he found his way out through the other end of the subway. I hope this explains. 🙂

  1. That was quite a scary one. The poor guy had to pay with his life. . This Friday fictioneers seems to be an interesting one. When is the prompt published?

  2. That was sad. He had to pay the price with his life. Good one, Esha. You were successful in creating a suspense. 😀
    Hey, by the way, I have written five sentence fiction this week after so long. Do check it out and join if you would like.

    1. Thanks Vinitha. Glad to hear from you after a long time. 🙂

      Oh, good to know the five-sentence fiction is back. Will surely check it out and try and see if I can come up with something! Thanks for the reminder, btw. 🙂

  3. Welcome to Friday Fictioners, feeling great to see you here…and what a lovely story to begin with…looking forward to more stories.

  4. Looks like he botched, big time. And the killer actually wasn’t behind the money, right? He just wanted an excuse to kill. Well written, Esha

  5. Wow, those guys didn’t waste any time, did they? Very taught and concise writing, Esha. Very good.

    Welcome! Enjoy the challenge of 100-word stories. Your writing will get even better. I have seen it for myself, the improvement in my writing.

    1. Thank you very much! Fiction is new to me but I’m loving this. Yes, hopefully as you say, the stories will get polished over time with plenty of practice! That’s what I’m in for, mainly. Thanks for stopping by and sharing your encouraging words. Means a lot to me. 🙂

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